Here’s my entry for the current writing prompt at Velvet Verbosity:
Image by poropitia outside the box via Flickr
The word is INHIBITED:
Inside the Veil
Inside a space, there is a child.
And inside that child a space.
Writing,
Scribbling.
Inhibited by a frail veil.
She takes off the veil and sees for the first time.
Not through meshed silk.
But through human eyes,
With open perception,
She sees the world,
And for once, decides to join in.
The road is daunting,
A looming graveyard behind her.
Full of memories.
She can’t leave them behind.
Though they hinder her pace.
But inside where there was just a space,
Now there is a jewel.
The child who learned hard lessons.
Has finally learnt of their use.
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This was beautiful. I love the imagery of the child finding its way.
visiting from 100 words
Thanks. It was done as a spontaneous piece so I wasn’t quite sure if it would work.
This was very moving for me. Sometimes those spontaneous pieces hold a lot of truth.
Thanks. I usually prefer my spontaneous pieces. Planning just doesn’t seem to work much for me.
A nice capture of your mental imagery – like a mental photograph.
Cool.
Thanks very much Lou. xx
Hi there … popping in from the 100-word challenge … my first time participating .
I like the sense of growth … hard lessons help to mould and shape character .
Thanks. I agree. Hard lessons can always teach us something worthwhile.
Thanks. I agree. Hard lessons can always teach us something worthwhile.
There is a deep wisdom as well as an innocence in this piece. Very delicate, very ancient. Very nice.
Thanks. xx
Nicely done. I like the imagery of the graveyard behind her, both the haunting quality of the “past”, but also the idea that she’s laid it to rest.